fiction friday 70: back to you. part 16. #fiction

fiction friday.

back to you. part 16. [previous: part 1 | part 2 | part 3 | part 4 | part 5 | part 6 | part 7 | part 8 | part 9 | part 10 | part 11 | part 12 | part 13 | part 14 | part 15]

Sorry… it’s a bit short… but it was a natural place to say, ‘cut!’ Please don’t hate me!

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Dani didn’t punch Adam. Or push him away. But she mumbled into his kiss.

“I never thought you’d forgive me…”

“Dani… I never thought you’d forgive me.”

She had to take her mouth from his. “It wasn’t your fault.” When she saw that he was about to speak, she rested a finger across his lips. “It was me. It is me.” Again, her tears fell. “I can’t believe I let it get here. Finn… and this whole day. I buried everything. I think I just wanted it to be easy.” She sighed softly. “But I never got over you.”

He wiped her tears. “And Finn?”

Her eyes fell from his. “He was there for me. I was weak… broken… and he helped me… he took care of me. I loved him for that. But I never fell in love. Because I was still in love with you.”

He had to catch his breath when he heard those words. “Dani, you are not weak. You left. You’re here. You couldn’t marry him. No matter how beautiful you look in this dress.”

“Adam…” She looked at him again and smiled when she saw his smile.

“You do look beautiful.”

“I ruined my hair.”

“You’re perfect.” His fingers tangled in her hair, gently twisting it around his fingers for a moment before he pulled her into his arms. She closed her eyes and sighed when he held her. “Dani… I’ve been imagining this moment for a long time.”

She smiled and opened her eyes. She, too, had imagined it hundreds of times. But before she spoke, she saw something over Adam’s shoulder. Or she didn’t see something…

“Adam?” She pulled away. “Was there a limo parked over there when you got here?”

“Yes… why?”

“It’s gone. I never told the driver to leave…”

“Does it matter?”

“No… but… if he’s been in contact with Finn, Finn knows where we are.”

“What do you want to do? Should we leave?”

Dani took a deep breath and looked over Adam’s shoulder again. And then she saw a car whip into the sand where the limo had been parked.

Dani was silent. Adam asked her again. “Dani? Should we go?”

“It’s too late.”


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Sandra is a writer, blogger, poet, artist, emotional disaster. She thinks far too much and sleeps far too little. Sandra lives in the Northeastern U.S. but dreams of an oceanfront home in Italy, but she would settle for a non-oceanfront home in Italy, too. She loves books, brutal honesty, coffee, and the color black. She hates insincerity, beer, whipped cream, and facebook. And she is uncomfortable talking about herself in the third person.
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21 Responses to fiction friday 70: back to you. part 16. #fiction

  1. I like how you tied Finn and the limo together, to find them. Good plan. Now, somebody gonna end up in the lake? Finn’s already had a bad day, might as well be him. 😃

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  2. Definitely a good place to end this scene! I’m waiting to see where you’re going! Anxiously!

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  3. magarisa says:

    Another perfect scene! Uh-oh … Finn’s here.

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  4. Just when I thought “happily ever after” you’ve introduced a new twist! Lovely.

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  5. I think you’d do well writing books, if you haven’t already!

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  6. Lennon Carlyle says:

    What a terrific piece! Leaving us wanting more as usual I see 😂

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