september by the ocean. #poetry

night.

some days I quietly remember
that warm night in September
when I found you by the ocean
both overcome with emotion
I knew I’d found the reason
I had to keep believing
because you smiled and words were spoken
and I knew… never again would I be broken

• • • • •

[I always think my rhyming poetry is terrible… but I was so happy I was able to write something that I’m sharing it anyway. I hope it’s okay. And this is not based on a true story (bummer)… it’s based on characters from my ‘secret book’.]


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About what sandra thinks

Sandra is a writer, blogger, poet, artist, emotional disaster. She thinks far too much and sleeps far too little. Sandra lives in the Northeastern U.S. but dreams of an oceanfront home in Hawaii where she could learn to surf. She loves books, brutal honesty, coffee, and the color black. She hates insincerity, beer, whipped cream, and facebook. And she is uncomfortable talking about herself in the third person.
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171 Responses to september by the ocean. #poetry

  1. sorryless says:

    Poetry is hard! Rhyming poetry, I’ve always found impossible. But you nailed this one. Nicely done!

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  2. The V Pub says:

    I loved it, Sandra! Is that a beach nearby? It looks so familiar. 🙂

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  3. There is no right or wrong with prose
    as anyone who’s tried sure knows
    the more you try to rhyme or not
    you’re bound to get into an awful mess and terribly frustrated!

    Keep up the writing, and the sharing.
    hugs.

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  4. It’s more than ok. You don’t give yourself nearly enough credit. So, we’ll do it for you: it’s terrific. And I want to be on the beach…NOW! 😃

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  5. magarisa says:

    I think you did well. 🙂

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  6. Marquessa says:

    Wonderful piece!

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  7. Captain Q says:

    I rhyme 99% of the time. I know it isn’t considered cool by most “enlightened” writers, but it is how my brain works. Just keep writing. Share what you feel like sharing, but always keep writing. Even if you don’t like it, someone will. I’m always surprised, I get the biggest reactions from posts I almost didn’t publish. Just keep writing!!!

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    • That happens to me, too — One of my posts with the highest views ever is a poem I thought was terrible!

      I think your rhyming is excellent. Some rhyming poetry I’ve read seems forced and awkward but not yours. I think it’s always in my head that mine will sound forced.

      And of course, I have no idea what the hell I’m doing anyway. I’m definitely not “enlightened”… 🙂

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  8. Viveka says:

    I love this!

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  9. Your rhyming & poetry sounded absolutely beautiful to me. 🙂

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  10. Christina Paster says:

    I think it’s wonderful 😊

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  11. dishu2112 says:

    Its beautiful 😊

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  12. preservedpoems says:

    beautiful

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  13. NERO says:

    The rhyming is beautiful 😍

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  14. ashuwrite says:

    Its really beautiful

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  15. I like this, a lot of feelings 💙

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  16. I really do like this poem, it seems like a memory from when you were with someone you enjoyed and had a great night on the beach. Those types of adventures are my favorite, when you really meet someone you will never forget. If you have a chance check out my poetry and art. Have a great weekend! caelidotblog.wordpress.com/2017/12/30/the-woman-in-blue/

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  17. I like it so much.

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  18. It is amazing!! Good job!!

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  19. Your writing is beautiful ✨ & my writings isn’t the rhyming poetry type – so well done 👏🏼

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  20. I love the sea and writing about it too.

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  21. The Wayfarer says:

    Great poem. It evokes a sense of longing and calm. Great blog too! 🙂

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  22. blindeyes19 says:

    that’s the cool thing about poetry, it can mean whatever you want it to mean. rhyming or not. I enjoyed reading your poem. 🙂

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  23. So so beautiful!!😍😍💕💕💕 Woww!!👏👏

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  26. Miriam says:

    This is fantastic. No wonder you got so many likes. Evokes a feeling.

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  27. Jonathan Pines says:

    Nice one, I think your rhyming os great!

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  28. allymrankin says:

    I really enjoyed your poem. It gave me a sort of bittersweet feeling, and I loved the flow of it.

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  29. Taylor Lynn says:

    This gives me so many happy poetry feelings. Well done, Sandra! 💞

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  30. beautiful poem and boy do I appreciate your honesty in saying you are critical of your rhyming poetry. I have that same issue and some times feel as though I force myself not to rhyme in fear of the self-criticism I dislike. Good to know I am not alone in that, though I hope to break from the notion.

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  31. Seida Yenge says:

    This os very sweet and short.

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  32. Seida Yenge says:

    My best poems are the ones I write when I pour my heart out in words.O forget about tbe world completely and focus on the invented individualized world of writing …….

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  33. Obol says:

    I think it’s lovely.

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  34. This is simple and sweet. I love it. I think everyone appreciates effort!

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  35. Reminded me of my first love! I was always too shy to ask her out. Damn I should have taken my chances 😅😅

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  36. SOAPERMAX says:

    This is great! I have poems too! 😊

    Like

  37. this is just soooo pretty 😍

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  38. this is so adorable omg

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  39. setheh says:

    Your piece is beautiful. Emotionally truthful and engaging.

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  40. Very special to be able to write about a positive moment in space, even if it be fiction, it is non-fiction for somebody. God bless.

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  41. StoryGirl says:

    This is really beautiful! I’ve never been particularly fond of my own rhyming poetry either, but I love the imagery in this.

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  42. sorryless says:

    Sandra,

    Well here’s the thing. It seems you have the rhythm AND the rhyme! And yes . . . this poem is most definitely ‘okay’. Times a thousand.

    Peace and poetry that sings

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  43. TheMetrist says:

    your rhyming is great

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  44. true mirage says:

    Beautiful poem.. I believe rhyming adds another dimension to the poem.

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  45. Mel Gutiér says:

    This is gorgeous! It did not suck at all! I loved the tenderness! Quite Perfect.

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