back to you. part 14. [previous: part 1 | part 2 | part 3 | part 4 | part 5 | part 6 | part 7 | part 8 | part 9 | part 10 | part 11 | part 12 | part 13]
Damn, I have no idea what I’m going to post for fiction friday when this story ends…
Standing at the edge of the dock, Dani wiped tears from her cheeks. She still wondered how she got there. Not to the lake… to a wedding day with the wrong man. Frustrated with herself, she sighed and reached up to the flowers in her hair and grabbed them. She ripped them from her hair and tossed them into the lake. She stared as they floated away. She didn’t care about the flowers. She didn’t care that’s she’d ruined her perfect wedding hair. She didn’t care about anything except fixing her mistakes.
Adam could feel his heart pounding in his chest as he neared the lake. And when he reached the end of the winding road he knew so well, he saw exactly what he knew he would find. The car. The long, shiny, fancy white car. Maybe even the one he drove past on his way back to town. It was a sign. He was right where he was supposed to be.
And so was Dani.
Adam could see her on the dock, standing alone staring out into the water. Memories of time spent there with her began flooding his head as he watched her. He could have lost himself in those memories for hours, but he had to shake them off. He took a deep breath and tried to remember how to walk.
As he slowly stepped toward her, he watched her tug at her beautiful hair, pulling flowers out and throwing them into the water. He knew what she was feeling… because he knew her. She was angry with herself. She didn’t know how to fix everything. And she always wanted to fix everything.
Adam stepped up onto the dock where he’d just been pacing and thinking and cursing himself. He tried to be quiet, but if the thoughts screaming in Dani’s head were anything like those in his own, she wouldn’t hear him anyway.
Barely breathing, Adam walked slowly closer to her. When he was just a few steps away, he stopped and watched her. She had stopped worrying about keeping her dress from the ground as she stood gazing out over the water. She lifted a hand to her face, and even though he could only see the back of her, Adam knew she was crying. He knew it and it hurt him like a thousand knives. He had to touch her.
Finally, he drew in a deep breath and as he let it escape, he softly spoke her name. “Dani.”
His voice didn’t startle her because she already knew he was there. She knew before he spoke. She could feel his heart pounding the whole time.
Dani’s shoulders rose and fell with her sigh. Adam held his breath as she slowly turned around. The moment he saw her eyes, his knees weakened and his heart raced madly. Cautiously, he reached for her, gently laying a hand on her cheek. He watched her lips as they silently traced the shape of his name.
In that moment, he couldn’t figure out how he could possibly take another breath without her. He leaned closer to her and touched his lips to hers. He felt her hands grasp his shoulders as he lost himself in the beautiful softness of her mouth. As their kiss deepened, Adam brought his other hand to her face. He held her like precious china as he tasted the love he longed for. He couldn’t imagine ever letting her go. He never wanted their kiss to end.
But in an instant, he lost her.
She took her mouth from his and pushed him away. When she took a step back from him, he was forced to let her go. She lifted a hand to cover her mouth as she gasped. “Oh God.”
©2017 what sandra thinks
Ruh roh! That just made it really real. I smell a showdown! 😃
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It’s like Adam just got another punch in the face… although not literally this time…
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She’s not gonna push him away is she?!? 😳
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Well, she kind of already did… literally… but you know me… 🙂
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Drama, drama, drama! There needs to be another fight, on that dock, with somebody ending up in the water. 😃
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But only Adam knew where to find her…
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Ah, that’s a good point. So is she gonna knock him into the lake? 😃
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Oh damn… I have, like, 3 versions of how this goes already written (well, partially written) and now I think I need to combine them somehow or change something or write another version. Hm. Maybe Finn will figure out where they are. I went both ways with that. I was kind of feeling like I wrote myself into a corner… I have been in a little bit of a panic over the next part!
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Options are good. I’m sure it’ll be great no matter which way you go with it. 😃
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And if I ever put this together and even think of publishing it (lol), I’m sure I’ll make all sorts of changes… I guess nothing is set in stone even after I post it here…
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I totally get that. I have to fight that urge when I’m making a piece of glass. I tinker with the soldering sometimes, to the point of fucking it up. Don’t be like me! 😃
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Well… I already decided I hated my original ending. (I probably never mentioned that this whole story is adapted from something I wrote years ago…) So I wrote another one. And then another… and another. Today, I started version 4. This time, I’m going to try without looking at the other versions at all… and see what happens. I guess it’s a bit of self-torture… 🙂
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Hahaha! The pen is mightier than the sword? 😃
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Unless I’m being chased. 🙂
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I don’t know, man. You ever seen Grosse Pointe Blank? 😃
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Hahaha… yes! 🙂
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Finally, they kiss!
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Inevitable, I guess… especially when I’m the one writing this… haha 😀
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They’ve GOT to get back together. 😉
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That might happen… 🙂
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Pretty please? 😉
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🙂 You know me… ♥
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Yep 😊❤
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Oh. No. You. Didn’t…And you tell me about my cliffhangers??? You’ve got me like…wait…what? where’s the rest??? 😣
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I know that was a really mean place to stop. But… I had to do it. 🙂 Also… the next part isn’t ready yet… 😀
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Can’t wait!
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🙂
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Oh, yes, I like it! Either Finn is there or her foot slipped and she’s falling backwards… 🙂
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I am now rethinking some stuff I wrote… but of course, I wrote 3 different ways this could go already… lol 😀
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What Marquessa said. Yep. And Beach. What Beach said.
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Thanks, Julie! 🙂
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Um…..I seriously cannot wait until tomorrow for the next post! Keeping me in suspense. But, I’m glad she pushed him away….will she give him another chance? Will Finn show up and ruin the moment? Or will she walk away to find herself? You’re driving me crazy! I want to know right now! LOL I absolutely love this story! Well done, very well done.
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I’m worried about tomorrow. I tried going in so many different directions that I just don’t even know which way to choose… I’ve written the next part 5 times but I think they’re all crap. 🙁
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Hmmm, maybe write down 1 – 5 on little pieces of paper and draw one out of a hat? 🙂 Either way, I’m sure we’ll love it. Or, take your time and post when you’re ready, just don’t leave your fans hanging OK? LOL
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‘Fans’… haha… you’re funny. 😃I don’t know… I just hate them all so much. When I start again, I can’t help looking back at the last version and figuring out what I want to keep but that just confuses the issue further! I think I need to start from scratch…
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Such a perfectionist! 🙂
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Or a hack… I have no idea what I’m doing! 🙂
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Oh God, what happened! Can’t wait to read the next part!
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It’s going to be delayed a little… 😦
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And I’m sure that it’s going to be well worth the wait. 😃
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I hope so!
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I’m sure it will be. 💕😊
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I can’t wait for the next one!!!! This is going on so well!!!!
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Thanks so much!
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You had us fooled. She was in love with Ava all the time!
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Haha… that would have been an interesting twist!
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