chains. #poetry

nothing explains
the army of pains
running through my veins
my very soul maintains
the hurt it contains
and all hope remains
lost in other domains
while my voice complains
of violent rains
through windowpanes
and crashing planes
inside hurricanes
i’ve tried the retrains
my head never retains
the happy refrains
it only abstains
from the love it obtains
and loneliness reigns
and my heart remains
bound by these chains


©2018 what sandra thinks

I think this is only the second time I’ve written a poem where all of the lines rhyme… this is the first. I’m not sure how I feel about it… but there it is.

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About what sandra thinks

Sandra is a writer, blogger, poet, artist, emotional disaster. She thinks far too much and sleeps far too little. Sandra lives in the Northeastern U.S. but dreams of an oceanfront home in Hawaii where she could learn to surf. She loves books, brutal honesty, coffee, and the color black. She hates insincerity, beer, whipped cream, and facebook. And she is uncomfortable talking about herself in the third person.
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38 Responses to chains. #poetry

  1. Simon says:

    Hey ya, that’s a pretty cool poem. You must have spent ages on it ☺️

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  2. Well, I know how I feel about it, and I feel good. Not because of the hurt and the pain, but because the poem is very good. It shows just what you are capable of, and that is a lot more than you think you are. I feel good, and I hope that you feel a little bit good too.

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  3. It’s interesting that the only double use of any rhyming word is “remains”, and what remains is heart, and hope. There has to be a bit of karma in that happenstance, and that deserves an extra big hug.

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  4. Very well written, especially that it all rhymes. I couldn’t pull that off if I tried. LOL! 🙂

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  5. Marquessa says:

    I love it. Wish I could do that!

    Liked by 1 person

  6. I think it took incredible skill to come up with rhyming words that still maintained the story to a tee. Well friggin’ done, my dear! 😃👍🏻

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  7. sorryless says:

    You are a brilliant storm of words.

    Lovely, as per usual.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. mynewsdrive says:

    I wish i could frame a poem just like yours.
    You’ve written it with all your heart, the poem speaks for itself. Incredible. 🙂

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  9. Meg says:

    Wow! You are amazing! The poem flows beautifully and then to have all of its rhyme… fabulous! Calling Lin-Manuel Miranda… 😅

    Liked by 1 person

  10. 3rd Party says:

    I do poetry/hip hop. I like your poem. Every line rhymes is ok. Say it out loud, find a good pace to say it at. It can be weird for sure.#yothots#poetry

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