some days I quietly remember
that warm night in September
when I found you by the ocean
both overcome with emotion
I knew I’d found the reason
I had to keep believing
because you smiled and words were spoken
and I knew… never again would I be broken
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[I always think my rhyming poetry is terrible… but I was so happy I was able to write something that I’m sharing it anyway. I hope it’s okay. And this is not based on a true story (bummer)… it’s based on characters from my ‘secret book’.]
©2017 what sandra thinks
what sandra thinks 
Poetry is hard! Rhyming poetry, I’ve always found impossible. But you nailed this one. Nicely done!
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Thank you so much!
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Lovely poem!
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Thanks!
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I loved it, Sandra! Is that a beach nearby? It looks so familiar. 🙂
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Thanks, Rob. I cheated on the picture… It’s a stock photo. I should have looked through mine… I have lovely ones from The Cape. 🙂
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I thought it was from Revere. 😉
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It’s funny… I’m so close but I hardly ever go there… 🙂
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There is no right or wrong with prose
as anyone who’s tried sure knows
the more you try to rhyme or not
you’re bound to get into an awful mess and terribly frustrated!
Keep up the writing, and the sharing.
hugs.
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😃 Thanks… I do get frustrated… but I decided to post this one no matter what I thought of it…
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Yes!
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I agree with you whole-heartedly, Peter. Poetry is a creation of the artist. It is what the artist says it is and there are no rules. Good words of encouragement. I extend mine as well. Keep creating, Sandra you do it because you know you have to.
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Thank you so much. 🙂
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It’s more than ok. You don’t give yourself nearly enough credit. So, we’ll do it for you: it’s terrific. And I want to be on the beach…NOW! 😃
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Thanks… 🙂 I’d love to be on the beach, too. Like, in summer weather. I’m not having a very good day. 🙁
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Uh oh. What’s up?
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I don’t know… that’s why it sucks so much. I just feel terrible. I can’t get rid of that empty pointless feeling. And I can’t get myself to do anything. Like… anything. Didn’t even want to get out of bed. 🙁
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I’m sorry. I hate that feeling. Is it warm enough there to get out for a walk? Take some pics? Sun is good for the mood. 😊
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It’s about 30° and I can’t get myself to go anywhere anyway
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Dang. That’s chilly. It was near 60 here today. Maybe that warm air is comin’ Your way. I hate the cold days. Makes me want to hibernate ’til March.
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It’s supposed to be warmer tomorrow… 50-ish, maybe. But the kids have a half day… so I will probably be entertaining them all afternoon. And the morning? Well, I’ll probably be dragging my lazy ass out of bed just in time to shower and pick them up. *Sigh*
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Try this. Tell yourself: “I’m gonna get a solid nights sleep and get up in the morning, shower, go for a walk, then do something fun with the kids to celebrate the half day. Tomorrow is gonna be a good day.”
And type it out in response to this response…so I know you actually repeated it! 😏
But go into it thinking the opposite. Going into it thinking it’s gonna be a shitty day, and it will be. Going in thinking positive, even if forced, and you at least give yourself a fighting chance.
Type it back. And stop rolling your eyes. 😏
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Wow… you know me so well. Yep… I admit it… I was totally rolling my eyes.
Does copy/paste count?
I’m gonna get a solid nights sleep and get up in the morning, shower, go for a walk, then do something fun with the kids to celebrate the half day. Tomorrow is gonna be a good day.
I know this isn’t what you want to hear… and maybe you won’t even believe me… but I don’t make a decision to think negatively… nor can I make one to think positively. It just happens. It’s totally out of my control. At least that’s how it feels. So… yeah.
And you’re right about me on this one, too… I seriously doubt I’m going to do more than get my ass out of bed and grab a shower… maybe eat something… and pick up the kids. And then tell them to do homework a hundred times… until they eventually do it.
Yes… I can predict the future. 😛
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Ha! You’re killin’ me here. Ok. I get that it’s not a choice. However, if you fight those bad vibes when they first start comin’ on with some good vibes, or even just a “Fuck you, bad vibes. Not today motherfucker!” kinda mindset, besides rolling your eyes at my lingering nonsense, what’s the worst that can happen? Give it a try. 😊
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I will. I keep noticing more and more that I feel so much better when I’m not alone. Even if the kids are off doing homework or whatever… even if my husband is in his basement cave… just knowing someone is home makes me feel better…
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How’s your morning sunshine? 😃
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I didn’t even make it home from dropping off kids before I started crying. My back is hurting a lot. Maybe I zapped it too much last night. I don’t know but I’m scared because it feels so bad. What if I damaged something? I’m sorry for being so pathetic.
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Zapped it? With the TENS unit? They’re very low voltage, so I doubt you did anything bad. When’s your next PT session?
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Tuesday
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Ugh. Well, try ice after using the TENS. Most people like heat more than the ice, but ice is more effective. Try the e-stim still, but maybe decrease the intensity a bit, maybe leave it on less time. But try to ice it. It’s uncomfortable, but it helps. Do you stretch it at all? Does it help if you do?
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I do about a half hour every day of different stretches that the PT gave me.
I have been icing it since I got home this morning. It’s been a half hour. Maybe I should stop.
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You should be numb after that long. I wouldn’t leave it on more than an hour. Do your stretches after the ice comes off. Should loosen you up a bit.
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I stopped icing but then I really had to jump in the shower. I can do some stretches now. Still in a lot of pain. 🙁 I’m sorry I’m dumping this on you.
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No worries. You don’t have to have apologize. This topic is kinda in my wheelhouse. When you go back to PT, ask about ultrasound or diathermy. One of those may be more effective for you. Keep doing your stratches and maybe even some core strengthening. A lot of back pain can be attributed to weak core muscles and ensuing lack of support anteriorly.
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Thanks. It just seems the harder I try, the worse it gets. I don’t know that I’ve had any improvement since I started. It’s hard to say for sure because I’ve always had better days and worse days… add I still do. I don’t think I’ve had any more good days since I started. I may have even had fewer.
I’m an emotional disaster anyway but when this pain gets bad, I fall apart even more. I don’t want to be in pain forever but I think that’s what’s going to happen. It upsets me. 🙁
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Are you on any pain meds? If not, try a couple Midol. They’ll relax the muscles at least.
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I usually take nothing… but I took 3 Advil this morning… I probably need morphine.
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Hahaha. Nope. You need some medicinal marijuana. That would help you in numerous ways. 😃
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I’m having trouble not crying now that the kids are home. If it’s not the zapping, I don’t know why it’s so bad today. I finally try to do something about this pain and now it’s getting worse. WTF? I’m cursed.
I don’t think the Advil did shit for me, by the way. I just want to curl up in a ball and sleep so I can’t feel anything.
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Oh hon, I’m sorry. I can’t imagine the e-stun making it worse, but I’m not sure what, if anything, different you may have done today. If you think it’s the e-stim bothering it today, lay off of it for a bit. Try the ice pack again. See if you can get your husband to massage it down.
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It’s okay… not your fault at all. I’m just miserable. I’m sorry. 😦 I haven’t felt this worried about the pain in a long time. And I thought I should be getting better so it upsets me even more.
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Have you tried any Biofreeze or Sportscreme, etc?
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Not recently. I had Biofreeze but I’m not sure if I have anymore or if it’s just old… but I’ll check later.
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My patients love them some biofreeze now. 😊
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By the way… it feels a little tingly. Does that mean I did hurt myself with the TENS thing? I don’t know what to think anymore and I don’t know how to fix it. 😦
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No, the tingling will linger a bit after it’s removed. The idea is that the more days used, the longer lasting the effect will become. I wouldn’t worry much about it hurting you. It’s very low voltage. You don’t have any metal in your back?
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But I used it last night. Is it weird to still have tingling today? I’m sorry… that word sounds dirty to me. Tingling. Okay. Anyway… no, I have no metal anywhere in my body. Unless I put on earrings. 😛
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That is a long time to still have that effect. Hmmm. I hope I didn’t give you bad advice there. It should help, not hurt. 😕
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I’m sure it’s not your fault. I had been wanting to try that anyway. I just think that by the time I felt like everything was in the right place, the timer was half way through so I reset it. I probably shouldn’t have done that. Also, my chiropractor has used it on me in the past and nothing like this ever happened… and I’ve used ours before without this happening. So I really don’t know what any of this means. It’s probably my fault. It usually is. But I notice that the pain feels different today. I’m not even sure how to explain it. And I’m worried about telling the PT about this because she’s going to think I’m insane.
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No, I’d tell her about it. Tell her about the change in intensity of pain, where, about sitting and laying positions that may help or have been different lately. It’s your spine that bothers you, correct? It’s bone pain rather than muscle pain?
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I don’t know if it’s muscle or bone. It does feel like I have a knot in my lower back on the left side that’s been there for a very very long time… despite anything I’ve ever tried. I’ve always assumed it was muscle pain but I don’t know how I’d differentiate that from bone pain. On the x-ray, I have a little curve in my lower back that goes toward the left… at least that’s what it looked like to me.
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Any unnatural curve of the spine is gonna kink the nerve paths, thus pain. Chiropractor didn’t help? Keep in mind as well that abnormal tightness in a muscle(s) that innervates around the spine can exacerbate the awkward pull on the original area of the spine that’s affected. I bet a good massage on that muscle belly and ligaments would give you some relief. Can you talk somebody in the house into doing that for you?
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I’ve been going to a chiropractor for years (not very frequently… once a month or six weeks)… I don’t think it has ever helped and I should stop spending on it. Massage… haha – “somebody in the house”… well my son or daughter won’t do it! That leaves one…
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Exactly! You’re hurting. He can help. Seems like a given. No?
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Well, it seems that way to you and me…
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Hmph. 😐
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Well… our dishwasher was leaking… because we need something else to spend money on, you know? WTF?!? I am cursed. So yeah… he was dealing with that. Not with me… 😐
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Hmph. 😕
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And I haven’t noticed much difference with the stretching which is why I feel like none of this is working and I’m just always going to be in pain.
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What started it? Injury, stenosis, disc issue?
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My spine is a little curved… I never knew. I’ve had pain for years and I just figured I had to live with it. Over the years it has gradually gotten worse so I finally mentioned it to my doctor and she sent me for an x-ray so that’s how I know now. I started PT almost a month ago. I don’t expect I’m ever going to get better.
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Give the therapy a chance. You might be surprised. Have you tried wearing a compression garment to give support? There’s always surgical intervention, and it’s more advanced now.
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Somehow I missed this comment before. I’ve never worn anything. I think it might make it worse because I think it would give me too much back support… like, too much arch support… and I feel better when I’m curled up into a ball. And I’m scared as hell to have any kind of surgery. I think I’d have to figure out how to live with the pain. Although I’m not sure I can.
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Have you ever gone to see a pain management doc?
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No… what would one even do? I imagine recommend PT or give me medication…
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That’s true, but they may also consider nerve blocks. What about alternative things, like acupuncture, maybe massage therapy?
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I’d love to do acupuncture and/or massage therapy but I can’t afford to…
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I’ve never priced either, but I know insurance doesn’t cover it. Have you ever tried supplements, like glucosamine? Think some of it arthritis related?
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After the x-ray, the doc did say I have “a little arthritis”… but the curve was what she focused on. Massage is usually around $100… acupuncture may be a little less. I can get a small (very small) discount with my insurance but not much… not enough to make it affordable. I’d have a massage daily if I could. It would help me with many things…
I’ve never tried any supplements…
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You have a masseuse there…ask him. 😊
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He sucks. He never wants to do it. Like I’m putting him out… it’s too much work. But he should be thrilled to touch me!! I’m all girly. 🙂
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Well, now I can’t really argue about that last bit. I mean, c’mon. Being asked to lay hands on a woman…that you’re supposed to love? I’d want to. Seems like a no brainer.
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Exactly. Maybe that’s the problem… he’s a no brainer. 😛 Maybe I need to disrobe completely. But that would definitely need to wait until later… And who knows if that would even work!
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Couldn’t hurt. That’s a fairly obvious hint. 😃
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I think you did well. 🙂
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Thanks ♥
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You’re welcome, Sandra. ♥
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Wonderful piece!
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Thank you… ♥
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💜
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I rhyme 99% of the time. I know it isn’t considered cool by most “enlightened” writers, but it is how my brain works. Just keep writing. Share what you feel like sharing, but always keep writing. Even if you don’t like it, someone will. I’m always surprised, I get the biggest reactions from posts I almost didn’t publish. Just keep writing!!!
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That happens to me, too — One of my posts with the highest views ever is a poem I thought was terrible!
I think your rhyming is excellent. Some rhyming poetry I’ve read seems forced and awkward but not yours. I think it’s always in my head that mine will sound forced.
And of course, I have no idea what the hell I’m doing anyway. I’m definitely not “enlightened”… 🙂
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If you want to be honest…. I really don’t know what I’m doing either. I just close my eyes and write what I feel. If I think, I’m overthinking it. Not everything is good that I put down, but I tend to enjoy the ones I don’t realize I wrote.
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Yes… sometimes when I go back and read some of mine, I think, “Wow… I wrote that??” And I’m actually impressed with myself!
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I totally know what you mean.
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I love this!
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Thank you!
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Your rhyming & poetry sounded absolutely beautiful to me. 🙂
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Thank you so much. 🙂
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I think it’s wonderful 😊
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Thank you so much!
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Its beautiful 😊
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Thank you 🙂
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beautiful
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Thank you
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The rhyming is beautiful 😍
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Thanks so much. 🙂
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Its really beautiful
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Thank you
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I like this, a lot of feelings 💙
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Thank you so much ♥
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I really do like this poem, it seems like a memory from when you were with someone you enjoyed and had a great night on the beach. Those types of adventures are my favorite, when you really meet someone you will never forget. If you have a chance check out my poetry and art. Have a great weekend! caelidotblog.wordpress.com/2017/12/30/the-woman-in-blue/
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I like it so much.
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It is amazing!! Good job!!
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Thanks so so much!
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Your writing is beautiful ✨ & my writings isn’t the rhyming poetry type – so well done 👏🏼
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Thank you!
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Inspired!
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Thank you!
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I love the sea and writing about it too.
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It’s such a beautiful, peaceful place…
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Great poem. It evokes a sense of longing and calm. Great blog too! 🙂
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you like it… and my blog. 🙂
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that’s the cool thing about poetry, it can mean whatever you want it to mean. rhyming or not. I enjoyed reading your poem. 🙂
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Thanks so much! 🙂
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So so beautiful!!😍😍💕💕💕 Woww!!👏👏
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Thank you! 🙂
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My pleasure! 🙂
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Enthralling. ❤
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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beautiful
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Thank you!
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This is fantastic. No wonder you got so many likes. Evokes a feeling.
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Thank you! It’s so random that this one has gotten so many likes!
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Pleasant & sweet🙂
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Thanks so much! 🙂
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Nice one, I think your rhyming os great!
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Thanks so much… that’s very sweet of you!
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I really enjoyed your poem. It gave me a sort of bittersweet feeling, and I loved the flow of it.
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Thank you so much! Makes me happy to hear that. 🙂
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This gives me so many happy poetry feelings. Well done, Sandra! 💞
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Thank you so much… that’s lovely of you to say!
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beautiful poem and boy do I appreciate your honesty in saying you are critical of your rhyming poetry. I have that same issue and some times feel as though I force myself not to rhyme in fear of the self-criticism I dislike. Good to know I am not alone in that, though I hope to break from the notion.
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Thank you!
We are always harder on ourselves than anyone else is, I find. Lately, I’ve been posting what I write even if I don’t think it’s my best work. Hearing from others is great.
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This os very sweet and short.
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My best poems are the ones I write when I pour my heart out in words.O forget about tbe world completely and focus on the invented individualized world of writing …….
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That is definitely the best way to write… Pouring your heart out.
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Please follow and suggest followers.I noticed that Iv gained so much experience so far since the age of 16.
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I can also do duets.
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Thats so beautiful!!!
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Thank you
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I think it’s lovely.
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Thank you.
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This is simple and sweet. I love it. I think everyone appreciates effort!
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Thank you so much!
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Reminded me of my first love! I was always too shy to ask her out. Damn I should have taken my chances 😅😅
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Oh, but it’s so hard to take that risk. I think it’s worth it… but it’s not easy!
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Haha it is NOT at all easy ! Esp when you are a teen with all those raging hormones!
I have just started writing as well. Drop by sometime and I could really use you opinion!
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The teenage years are quite a challenge. Although, honestly, I’d go back and do them again. Provided I know what I know now… 🙂 I will check out your writing…
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This is great! I have poems too! 😊
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this is just soooo pretty 😍
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Thank you so much!
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this is so adorable omg
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Thank you!
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Your piece is beautiful. Emotionally truthful and engaging.
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Thank you so much.
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Very special to be able to write about a positive moment in space, even if it be fiction, it is non-fiction for somebody. God bless.
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Thank you so much. 🌸
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This is really beautiful! I’ve never been particularly fond of my own rhyming poetry either, but I love the imagery in this.
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Thanks so much!
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Sandra,
Well here’s the thing. It seems you have the rhythm AND the rhyme! And yes . . . this poem is most definitely ‘okay’. Times a thousand.
Peace and poetry that sings
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Sweet and kind as ever. Thanks so much… 🙂
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your rhyming is great
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Thank you
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Beautiful poem.. I believe rhyming adds another dimension to the poem.
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I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much!
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This is gorgeous! It did not suck at all! I loved the tenderness! Quite Perfect.
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I don’t know about perfect, but thank you.
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😉
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